Coherence in paragraphs
1. first you need to arrange the sentences in each paragraph according to an organizational principal.
a. Chronological - present your points in order of time from first to last.
b. Climactic - you save your strongest point, an arrange your other points for last.
c. logical order - your main points have a logical relationship you can not take them out of order. Especially for cause -and effect essays.
d. Random order - used on rare occasions when your points can be explained in nay order without affecting your reader's understanding.
2. Achieve coherence by providing transitions.
a. Repetition. - focuses the reader's attention on an idea and created a thread of meaning that runs through a paragraph or a paper, tying the whole thing together. Do not overdo it.
b. Synonyms. - Frequent repetition of a key word can become monotonous after while.
c. pronoun references. - use appropriate pronouns to refer to a key nons.
d. parallel structure. - helps to maintain focus, reinforces the unity of your thoughts, and adds emphasis.
e. Transitional words and phrases. - Show the relationship between points in a paragraph as well as between paragraphs in an essay.
Exercise!
1. my first impression of my supervisor was that he was aloof and arrogant; ___ , I discovered I was wrong. He was painfully shy.
2. Many best sellers have become pathetic movies, now long forgotten. ______, many poor novels have been turned into movie classics, such ad Gone with the Wind, that last forever.
3.The bush administration believes that an expensive and unproven missile defence system is needed to protect North American from a nin-existent threat. ____________. Canadians disagree.
1. but/ however
2. but/ however
3. on the contrary
pronoun- Antecedent Agreement
- pronouns = Words that substitute for a noun mentined elsewhere in a sentence or paragraph.
- Antecedent = the word or wards that a pronoun substitute for or refers to.
e.g. ) My two- year- old daughter insists on doing things her own way. This time is as close as it can be.
rule: A pronoun must agree with its antecedent.
Therefore; My two year-old- daughter insists on doing things its own way
OR this game is as close as she can be.
Relative pronouns
Who whoever - subject
Whom whomever - object } - both refers to people
Sunday, July 15, 2007
Saturday, July 7, 2007
meaning of life
I think everyone have experienced this feeling.
Is there such thing meaning of life?
What if I never existed? Do anyone care? Even if I fade away right now, does anyone care?
What if gine some weight or lose weight?
There are many people who are suffering from famine.
What if I was sick or healthy?
There are many people who are suffering from desease.
What if I was agry or beautiful?
What if I was rich or poor?
What if I was smart or idiot?
What if...Wha if....
There are no answers in my mind.
But I am looking for it and try to make change.
Because I believe the meaning of life is "making progress to be better humanbeing".
Is there such thing meaning of life?
What if I never existed? Do anyone care? Even if I fade away right now, does anyone care?
What if gine some weight or lose weight?
There are many people who are suffering from famine.
What if I was sick or healthy?
There are many people who are suffering from desease.
What if I was agry or beautiful?
What if I was rich or poor?
What if I was smart or idiot?
What if...Wha if....
There are no answers in my mind.
But I am looking for it and try to make change.
Because I believe the meaning of life is "making progress to be better humanbeing".
Monday, July 2, 2007
A life not lived.
The long untrimmed grass in a never ending field is where she sat reminiscing. She had never been able to breath that fresh air. For once she could just sit and take long deep breaths enjoying the cool but not cold air as it went in and out of her lungs. Like a wild lion set free in an African safari, she looked over her life. The sight was splendid, optimistic and hopeful. She could touch anything, like a child who has just learned how to craw and was free to touch and explore anything in their path. The taste that overcome her at that moment was the taste of freshly squeezed orange juice , the free feeling starts you off in the morning, and keeps you going through the whole day. Just like the toddler is ready t leave her immobile life for a life filled with uncut, untrimmed desires. Since the new change in her life,the sky was the limit.
Love untold.
I've created the story! Check this out.
The young women stood outside her fiances dorm room eagerly anticipating his return. Although she didn't know where he had gone in the middle of the night she certainly had speculation. Her face was overwhelmed by anger and her blue defined hurt misery and broken passion. " I just don't fell the same way about you." Were the words uttered by her fiance and she couldn't get them out of her mind. She still loved him. Suddenly she heard the the faint ring of an elevator being called to the service of the desired floor. It must be him she thought, she felt her heart rapidly increasing thumbs and she mentally prepared herself for the emotional stress that was to follow. He turned the corner.
"Suzy, what are you doing here?"
"The question is what is it that YOU were doing?"
" I went to grab a cup of coffee in the cafe."
" Joe, do you take me for a fool? I know what you're doing!"
" I can' t believe you don't trust me enough to let me do my own thing!"
He opened his dorm door and pushing her aside., he walked in. She followed him inside allowing there to be some distance between them. " Sit down." he said with a forceful tone tat she was too familiar with.
He knew that hid felling that were once filled with passion and infatuation had resisted and slowly tuned into something that even he could not call that love. He wanted her around because it was easy that way although their love has gone sour, she was still convenient to have around. He didn't want the process of breaking up. and this was the feeling that he grew how comfortable with.
"Listen baby, you know love me and I love you."
"Yes I know that you love mw and I love you too."
"Yes, I love you, and that's how this conversation will end"
She looked up him, tried to read his mind. But all she can figure out was scent of perfume as turns around and stars walk.
to be continued....(perhaps!)
The young women stood outside her fiances dorm room eagerly anticipating his return. Although she didn't know where he had gone in the middle of the night she certainly had speculation. Her face was overwhelmed by anger and her blue defined hurt misery and broken passion. " I just don't fell the same way about you." Were the words uttered by her fiance and she couldn't get them out of her mind. She still loved him. Suddenly she heard the the faint ring of an elevator being called to the service of the desired floor. It must be him she thought, she felt her heart rapidly increasing thumbs and she mentally prepared herself for the emotional stress that was to follow. He turned the corner.
"Suzy, what are you doing here?"
"The question is what is it that YOU were doing?"
" I went to grab a cup of coffee in the cafe."
" Joe, do you take me for a fool? I know what you're doing!"
" I can' t believe you don't trust me enough to let me do my own thing!"
He opened his dorm door and pushing her aside., he walked in. She followed him inside allowing there to be some distance between them. " Sit down." he said with a forceful tone tat she was too familiar with.
He knew that hid felling that were once filled with passion and infatuation had resisted and slowly tuned into something that even he could not call that love. He wanted her around because it was easy that way although their love has gone sour, she was still convenient to have around. He didn't want the process of breaking up. and this was the feeling that he grew how comfortable with.
"Listen baby, you know love me and I love you."
"Yes I know that you love mw and I love you too."
"Yes, I love you, and that's how this conversation will end"
She looked up him, tried to read his mind. But all she can figure out was scent of perfume as turns around and stars walk.
to be continued....(perhaps!)
How Do Greetings Differ Around the World?
There is a range of different greetings around the world, fom a simple "hello", a hadshake , a kiss, or a bow, to sticking out your tongue in Tibet!!But how you shake someone's hand in one country may differ from the custom in another. In some countries you kiss as a greeting. But how many times do you kiss? Which cheek so you start wth? In which countries do you bow? Here are some examples of greetings from few parts of the world.
A bow is a light handshake with eyes averted is the usual greeting in most Asian cultures where people do not like to have body contact when greeting. In China and Taiwan, shaking hands is customary, but people often not their hands or give a slight bow as well. The Chinese like to applaud, and a visitor may be greeted with a group of people clapping their hands. When you are applauded, you must return the applause or say thank you.
Bow is the traditional form of greeting in Japan, also in Korea. people in the Philippines are much more touch- oriented than those in other Asian cultures. Here, handshaking is a common custom, with both men and women shaking hands in a friendly fashion. Filipinos may also greet each other with a quick flick of the eyebrows.
In Malaysia, people greet each other saying, "Where are you going?" But this is not really a question. he polite answer is, " Just for a walk." In India, people greet each other with " Namaste." As they say this, they bend or nod and out their palms together as though they are playing.
European greetings very from shaking hands to kissing. In Britain, they do not like physical contact as much American culture do. So, they opt for the handshake. Germany follows the same rules as Britain. I France, however, kissing i the rule. In most places, a two-kiss greeting is polite, but in Paris, the greeting is four kisses, starting with the left cheek. In Brittany, there is a three-kiss greeting, and in most other parts of France it is a two-kiss greeting. Greetings in
Senegal take the form of handshakes, and they are even more significant there.In Senegal, a person will stop doing something really important to spend ten minutes greeting a person that he or she has seen n hour ago. This is to acknowledge the existence of another human being and hour ago. This is to acknowledge the existence of another human being and is seen as a priolity in Senegalese culture. Every member of the community greets every other member, regardless of status or wealth.
Some culture have variations on these common greetings. For example, The Inuit of North America traditionally used the knuik in place of he kiss. The kunik involves placing noses next to each other and lightly rubbing or sniffing. Most Inuit now use their lips to kiss, but the kunik is sometimes still used with chldlen. Though most New Zealanders use a handshake when greeting, the tradition of the native Maori people is to press noses together to show trust and closeness.
Of course, these are only a few of the greetings used around the world. There are even more variations in other countries. Leaning about these customs not only makes us more polite travelers, but also gives us insight into the differences between people around theworld, as well as an understanding of each country's special values.
A bow is a light handshake with eyes averted is the usual greeting in most Asian cultures where people do not like to have body contact when greeting. In China and Taiwan, shaking hands is customary, but people often not their hands or give a slight bow as well. The Chinese like to applaud, and a visitor may be greeted with a group of people clapping their hands. When you are applauded, you must return the applause or say thank you.
Bow is the traditional form of greeting in Japan, also in Korea. people in the Philippines are much more touch- oriented than those in other Asian cultures. Here, handshaking is a common custom, with both men and women shaking hands in a friendly fashion. Filipinos may also greet each other with a quick flick of the eyebrows.
In Malaysia, people greet each other saying, "Where are you going?" But this is not really a question. he polite answer is, " Just for a walk." In India, people greet each other with " Namaste." As they say this, they bend or nod and out their palms together as though they are playing.
European greetings very from shaking hands to kissing. In Britain, they do not like physical contact as much American culture do. So, they opt for the handshake. Germany follows the same rules as Britain. I France, however, kissing i the rule. In most places, a two-kiss greeting is polite, but in Paris, the greeting is four kisses, starting with the left cheek. In Brittany, there is a three-kiss greeting, and in most other parts of France it is a two-kiss greeting. Greetings in
Senegal take the form of handshakes, and they are even more significant there.In Senegal, a person will stop doing something really important to spend ten minutes greeting a person that he or she has seen n hour ago. This is to acknowledge the existence of another human being and hour ago. This is to acknowledge the existence of another human being and is seen as a priolity in Senegalese culture. Every member of the community greets every other member, regardless of status or wealth.
Some culture have variations on these common greetings. For example, The Inuit of North America traditionally used the knuik in place of he kiss. The kunik involves placing noses next to each other and lightly rubbing or sniffing. Most Inuit now use their lips to kiss, but the kunik is sometimes still used with chldlen. Though most New Zealanders use a handshake when greeting, the tradition of the native Maori people is to press noses together to show trust and closeness.
Of course, these are only a few of the greetings used around the world. There are even more variations in other countries. Leaning about these customs not only makes us more polite travelers, but also gives us insight into the differences between people around theworld, as well as an understanding of each country's special values.
Misconception
Things are not always what they seem to be. O the surface of an ocean there is a storm but under the water its calm with the gentle rocking of the current. Everytihng is judge at first glance whether we like it or not. This is often the misconception of love.
My experience with love has been bittersweet. I spent four years of my life with someone I adored, through the eyes of other they saw perfection and envied its qualties. What they failed to see is nothing perfect. When you forget to think about yourself and put your emotional needs first, You've become unhealthy.
To the world you may just be one person out of the billions of its inhabitants but everyone is able to find someone. Its one of life's greatest searches, It takes time and many lessons are leatned through the process. When the "right" person is finally found, it may not last forever. Divorce is a lot more common these days especially in order aged couples. Those one the couples that put their family first and eachother second. It leaves a big empty void and the couples forget about what they once loved each other for.
Loss of communication defines a bad relationship simply because, if your voice is not heard then nothing can reach a compromise. Yu can struggle to keep the ralationship going but emotions will flare.
Meaning the world to one person person is the point in the relationship where nothing seems to matter but each other. Fun is always being had and you cannot take your hands off eachother. With this slage through, a lot of peola fail to recognize their responsibilities and other commitments that they previously had. Friends start to feel ignores and same might be lost. By constantly being out you drift aeay from your family and communication is kept to a mare minimum. Sometimes you put your partners needs before your own and your own self person is being ignores. It requires a careful balance.
Love can be good or bad, What your definition of love is and what it means to you will be the basis n how well your love life will be. key things that everyone seemes to forget in a relationship of yourself mentally. This is such a simple conclusion on how to have a good love life yet people till suffer in relationships where they and get nothing in return.
When you finally do meet that person that you mean the world to and the feeling are the same, it is a special thing. You'v met someone in this world that you can love and be with for as long as you live. make sure you've happy and your needs are being met and suddenly you do not feel so small to the world.
My experience with love has been bittersweet. I spent four years of my life with someone I adored, through the eyes of other they saw perfection and envied its qualties. What they failed to see is nothing perfect. When you forget to think about yourself and put your emotional needs first, You've become unhealthy.
To the world you may just be one person out of the billions of its inhabitants but everyone is able to find someone. Its one of life's greatest searches, It takes time and many lessons are leatned through the process. When the "right" person is finally found, it may not last forever. Divorce is a lot more common these days especially in order aged couples. Those one the couples that put their family first and eachother second. It leaves a big empty void and the couples forget about what they once loved each other for.
Loss of communication defines a bad relationship simply because, if your voice is not heard then nothing can reach a compromise. Yu can struggle to keep the ralationship going but emotions will flare.
Meaning the world to one person person is the point in the relationship where nothing seems to matter but each other. Fun is always being had and you cannot take your hands off eachother. With this slage through, a lot of peola fail to recognize their responsibilities and other commitments that they previously had. Friends start to feel ignores and same might be lost. By constantly being out you drift aeay from your family and communication is kept to a mare minimum. Sometimes you put your partners needs before your own and your own self person is being ignores. It requires a careful balance.
Love can be good or bad, What your definition of love is and what it means to you will be the basis n how well your love life will be. key things that everyone seemes to forget in a relationship of yourself mentally. This is such a simple conclusion on how to have a good love life yet people till suffer in relationships where they and get nothing in return.
When you finally do meet that person that you mean the world to and the feeling are the same, it is a special thing. You'v met someone in this world that you can love and be with for as long as you live. make sure you've happy and your needs are being met and suddenly you do not feel so small to the world.
Sunday, July 1, 2007
Our Future
The myriad variety of moral issues today to real changes in the near future.
The issue of judicial independence, and therefore the powers of gobvernment over their citizens is an issue which is expected to be resolved in the future. Currenrly many democratic governments are attmpting to undermine the "check and Balance" system utilized by most nations. This system involves two factions which work to ensure hat the needs of citizens are met. The executive is elected by the people directry, and has the most widespread influence on society. The judiciary involves the preservation of the constitution, which ensures the regardless of political overcome the judiciary, democracy can become corrupt and ultimately fall into totalitarian dictatorship. Specifically, in Canada, various specifically, in Canada, various officials in the government have successfully undermined the manner by which judges are appointed. Normally, collaboration between layers, ministers, and judges selects members of the lawyer and law enforcement fields to become judges. The present administration has a " Tough on Crime" approach, witch is mirrored by law enforcement detachments. thus, by allowing law enforcement officers to choose who the judges are, the government is giving itself the ability to influence what type of person takes the post. In the near future, this could result in repercussions in all aspects of law and order in Canada, and other nations in similar predicaments.
As a result, one could easily foresee punishments such as the death sentence being instated in Canada. As mentioned before, the political pressure for a " Tough on Crime" approach is beginning to seep into the judiciary. However, an economic pressure id evident as well. For every male prisoner in Canada, it costs $ 62,000 every year on average. Even worse, every female costs $155,000 ( an increase of several thousand from last year). Canada's lenient laws ensure that only the most heinous offenders see prison for more than a year, Most of our long- term prisoners (prisoners who serve over two years) would have been executed under American court system. This results in increased support for a " social justice" ideology in which the harm to society over weights the offender's rights., resulting support for death sentencing.
Furthermore, the economic repercussions resulting from our current system effect our governments ' viewpoint on euthanasia, For our prison system , it costs 2 billion dollars more is spent in indirect health care funding). Many of the patients that this funding goes towards have small chances for life, and would rather die. Some of the most expensive treatments, such as cancer, have also the lowest radio of successful patients. Many of these patients would rather opt for Euthanasia than suffer through the treatment. Furthermore, society, many say, would benefit from the increased funds available if this option was allocated to patients,. The moral issue, however ,still remainds. Another faction argues that this would allow for social Darwinidm to prevail, in which only the healthy as well.Euthanasia may become a iable option used by the government as a resoult of the economic and spcial pressures of present day issues.
A vast quantiry of current isued os morality affect the path the future will take.
The issue of judicial independence, and therefore the powers of gobvernment over their citizens is an issue which is expected to be resolved in the future. Currenrly many democratic governments are attmpting to undermine the "check and Balance" system utilized by most nations. This system involves two factions which work to ensure hat the needs of citizens are met. The executive is elected by the people directry, and has the most widespread influence on society. The judiciary involves the preservation of the constitution, which ensures the regardless of political overcome the judiciary, democracy can become corrupt and ultimately fall into totalitarian dictatorship. Specifically, in Canada, various specifically, in Canada, various officials in the government have successfully undermined the manner by which judges are appointed. Normally, collaboration between layers, ministers, and judges selects members of the lawyer and law enforcement fields to become judges. The present administration has a " Tough on Crime" approach, witch is mirrored by law enforcement detachments. thus, by allowing law enforcement officers to choose who the judges are, the government is giving itself the ability to influence what type of person takes the post. In the near future, this could result in repercussions in all aspects of law and order in Canada, and other nations in similar predicaments.
As a result, one could easily foresee punishments such as the death sentence being instated in Canada. As mentioned before, the political pressure for a " Tough on Crime" approach is beginning to seep into the judiciary. However, an economic pressure id evident as well. For every male prisoner in Canada, it costs $ 62,000 every year on average. Even worse, every female costs $155,000 ( an increase of several thousand from last year). Canada's lenient laws ensure that only the most heinous offenders see prison for more than a year, Most of our long- term prisoners (prisoners who serve over two years) would have been executed under American court system. This results in increased support for a " social justice" ideology in which the harm to society over weights the offender's rights., resulting support for death sentencing.
Furthermore, the economic repercussions resulting from our current system effect our governments ' viewpoint on euthanasia, For our prison system , it costs 2 billion dollars more is spent in indirect health care funding). Many of the patients that this funding goes towards have small chances for life, and would rather die. Some of the most expensive treatments, such as cancer, have also the lowest radio of successful patients. Many of these patients would rather opt for Euthanasia than suffer through the treatment. Furthermore, society, many say, would benefit from the increased funds available if this option was allocated to patients,. The moral issue, however ,still remainds. Another faction argues that this would allow for social Darwinidm to prevail, in which only the healthy as well.Euthanasia may become a iable option used by the government as a resoult of the economic and spcial pressures of present day issues.
A vast quantiry of current isued os morality affect the path the future will take.
The incomplete anger: narative essay
1.The thesis is clearly implied in pragraph one. What is it?
- The auther was invited to Ol' Jack's fishing expedition to hte Thomas River while he visited his friend, Sarnia.
2.The author uses possessions and actions to build Ol' Jacks character. Explain.
Possessions/Actio Personal characteristic
- has twenty fishing rods taugled -enjoys fishing
- monstrous truck - likes big things
- tackle boxes, colours, paddles - large - minded
- Cames early in the morning. - graudeur
-bed - magnanimity
-put ketchup in vodlca - disorganized
- diligent
3. This is an example of a humerous escapade or an embrassing incident. Is there a theme or a moral?
- The authoe learnd that he should make sure about everything what he would do before acting. -
4. The auther presents himels as a victim within this humerous escapade. What is his role or purpose?
- The author tends to be passive as or Jack, Forces him to do his actions and Ol' jsck totally controls prepouderantly.
Soliloquy
- A asppech by a character audience ( reader) what the characther is thinking or what he is planning to do.
A soliloquy's purpose may be:
1. To reveal a character's mood and the reason for his mood
2. To reveal the character ( qualities) of the speaker
3. To reveal the motive of a character
4. To reveal the protagonist's opinion of another major character
5. To advance plot
6. To create suspense
- The auther was invited to Ol' Jack's fishing expedition to hte Thomas River while he visited his friend, Sarnia.
2.The author uses possessions and actions to build Ol' Jacks character. Explain.
Possessions/Actio Personal characteristic
- has twenty fishing rods taugled -enjoys fishing
- monstrous truck - likes big things
- tackle boxes, colours, paddles - large - minded
- Cames early in the morning. - graudeur
-bed - magnanimity
-put ketchup in vodlca - disorganized
- diligent
3. This is an example of a humerous escapade or an embrassing incident. Is there a theme or a moral?
- The authoe learnd that he should make sure about everything what he would do before acting. -
4. The auther presents himels as a victim within this humerous escapade. What is his role or purpose?
- The author tends to be passive as or Jack, Forces him to do his actions and Ol' jsck totally controls prepouderantly.
Soliloquy
- A asppech by a character audience ( reader) what the characther is thinking or what he is planning to do.
A soliloquy's purpose may be:
1. To reveal a character's mood and the reason for his mood
2. To reveal the character ( qualities) of the speaker
3. To reveal the motive of a character
4. To reveal the protagonist's opinion of another major character
5. To advance plot
6. To create suspense
Marathon training!!
For the runnners!! Here are pace predictor!!
5K 10 half marathon marathon
16:00 33:55 1:14:40 2:36:47
18:00 37:47 1:24:00 2:56:23
20:00 41:59 1:33:20 3:15:58
22:00 46:11 1:42:41 3:35:34
5K 10 half marathon marathon
16:00 33:55 1:14:40 2:36:47
18:00 37:47 1:24:00 2:56:23
20:00 41:59 1:33:20 3:15:58
22:00 46:11 1:42:41 3:35:34
The art in my life.
Art is my key to the secret life, my way down o the core of my personality, my looking glass. Painting started it. From the beginning the proess of transforming paintds into live color has its way with me., leading me from hobby to art. Painting filld me with a sense of accomplishment and purity. I draw from the inside out. The free spirit, pure colors of this work opens and pushes the boundaries of my imagination and gives me many oprtunities for an original and expressive finished product.
Once, I wantes to attend attend the Wmily Carr institute od art and design in september, where I hoped to earn my cachelor's in communication design. In the future, I believe that trough art I will be able to change lives. I will lean to reach out to these who do not share a common language by communicating with them through visual arts. I will follow the career path that I have chosen and will be able to push my boundaries in my ideas while developing my own skills.
Once, I wantes to attend attend the Wmily Carr institute od art and design in september, where I hoped to earn my cachelor's in communication design. In the future, I believe that trough art I will be able to change lives. I will lean to reach out to these who do not share a common language by communicating with them through visual arts. I will follow the career path that I have chosen and will be able to push my boundaries in my ideas while developing my own skills.
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